Feedback on final cut

Feedback Rough Cut 5

Feedback:

i got some good feedback from this. Asked peers class mates and friends to look at what they thought about the new rough cut. These are a few points that i collected as good and bad feedback.

• They said that the black and white was very effective with the contrast of the colour in the torture scene.
• they also said the layering worked really well over the top and made shots more interesting 
• titles at the beginning worked really well and colours against black and white worked well.
• not sure about coloured shadow on coloured parts maybe move these into more appropriate places.
• the candle lit effect was very effective.
• i think the character of the girl is very well done very good acting.
• i think at the end you need to have a finishing title of the working title to make it bold and and stand out create a big impact.
• maybe cut up the shots of the girl running as some of these go on too long 
• i really like how you have built up the narrative enigma
• you could also possibly move titles so they are longer and more spread out this would be slightly more effective i think they are too fast at the moment 
• i do like the opening shot though i think that works well when the text flashes on with light.

Feedback Rough cut 3

Idea Update

i have decided to change my idea from the original red christmas as the idea of snow and santa costume was no longer realistic. I decided to change this to a stalking killer scene crossed with a torture scene from before and after cross cutting between. I have taken intertexuality from the babysitter , Eden lake and cry wolf. From the baby sitter i have decided to use different shot from torture scene and apply this myself. From eden lake i have taken the idea of cross cutting 2 different stories and bringing it into one as almost a flash back and finally from cry wolf i have taken out the stalking scene at the beginning where she is running through the forest and falls. I will use this in similar setting.